雅思小作文如何拿高分？先避開(kāi)這些常見(jiàn)的雷區(qū)

如果大家想進(jìn)入國(guó)外大學(xué)，那么基本上都需要準(zhǔn)備語(yǔ)言成績(jī)，下面是由小編為大家整理的“雅思小作文如何拿高分？先避開(kāi)這些常見(jiàn)的雷區(qū)！”，僅供參考，歡迎大家閱讀本文。

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)之任務(wù)的完成度(Task Achievement)

常見(jiàn)問(wèn)題：概括寫(xiě)成了細(xì)節(jié)

小作文題目對(duì)我們的要求如下：Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

通過(guò)任務(wù)要求我們可以看到，我們既要概括圖表信息，又要篩選細(xì)節(jié)，還得在相關(guān)的地方作比較。三個(gè)任務(wù)都完成，才可以在這項(xiàng)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)得到6的起評(píng)分。而概括圖表信息時(shí)，考生經(jīng)常會(huì)把細(xì)節(jié)和數(shù)據(jù)加入去，結(jié)果掉到了5分的深淵(如果5分就夠了當(dāng)我沒(méi)說(shuō)過(guò)這話)。

問(wèn)題示例

The chart manifests that the electricity produced and consumed in China and United States in 2014 considerably overtook the other eight countries, reaching 5398 billion kWh and 4099 billion kWh in production, 5322 billion kWh and 3866 billion kWh in consumption respectively.

問(wèn)題分析

從句子的寫(xiě)作其實(shí)可以看出，這位考生的英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)其實(shí)不錯(cuò)，但是在前半句概括的部分(中國(guó)和美國(guó)的電力生產(chǎn)和消耗于其他幾個(gè)國(guó)家的對(duì)比)寫(xiě)完之后，又用reaching加了詳細(xì)的數(shù)據(jù)描寫(xiě)。這種畫(huà)蛇添足反而講原本能拿到的6分硬生生降到了5分*。

*評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)TA部分細(xì)則

6分 presents an overview with information appropriately selected

5分 recounts detail mechanically with no clear overview

修改建議

Generally, the chart manifests that the electricity produced and consumed in China and United States in 2014 considerably overtook the other eight countries.

總結(jié)：寫(xiě)overview即進(jìn)行圖表概括的時(shí)候，不要添加數(shù)據(jù)支持，加了數(shù)據(jù)就不是不是不是概括了。

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)之連貫和銜接(Coherence and Cohesion )

常見(jiàn)問(wèn)題：缺代詞、多重復(fù)

問(wèn)題示例

In 1980, festival was the most popular attraction，which accounted for 30% in 1980. The percentage of England people who visited festival decreased from 30% in 1980 to 28% in 2010.

問(wèn)題分析

讀完這兩句話大家的感覺(jué)應(yīng)該是真啰嗦。沒(méi)錯(cuò)，在連貫和銜接的評(píng)分中，5分的檔位這樣描述：may be repetitive because of lack of referencing and substitution.這里啰嗦的原因之一就是沒(méi)有使用代詞，比如在festival就出現(xiàn)了兩次。修改也很簡(jiǎn)單，改成this place就可以。顯得繁瑣的第二個(gè)原因就是1980年數(shù)據(jù)的重復(fù)，把第二次出現(xiàn)的數(shù)據(jù)刪掉即可。

修改建議

In 1980, festival was the most popular attraction，which accounted for 30% in 1980. During the following three decades, the percentage of England people who visitedthis place decreased to 28% in 2010.

總結(jié)：重復(fù)出現(xiàn)的名詞嘗試用適當(dāng)?shù)拇~代替，重復(fù)出現(xiàn)的數(shù)據(jù)在合適的銜接手段的幫助下省略掉。

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)之詞匯(Lexical Resources)

常見(jiàn)問(wèn)題：缺乏精準(zhǔn)度和捉襟見(jiàn)肘的同義替換

問(wèn)題示例：缺乏精準(zhǔn)度

The proportion of people who visited pavilion increased from its lowest point at 23% in 1980 to its peak at 45% in 1995

問(wèn)題分析

句子里說(shuō)從最低點(diǎn)上漲到最高點(diǎn)，這里明明是很大的漲幅，卻只用了increase這個(gè)看不出幅度大小的詞，顯得缺乏有效性。想象一下你從班級(jí)吊車尾考到了年級(jí)第一的場(chǎng)景，簡(jiǎn)單的我的成績(jī)提高了應(yīng)該展示不出你激動(dòng)的心情。

修改建議

The proportion of people who visited pavilionsoared/surged from its lowest point at 23% in 1980 to its peak at 45% in 1995.

問(wèn)題示例：缺少同義替換

因?yàn)槠膯?wèn)題，暫不展示缺少同義替換的樣文。但是我們可以回顧自己在寫(xiě)作時(shí)比較困擾的點(diǎn)在哪里。我最常被問(wèn)到的就是：在表示趨勢(shì)的句子中加入時(shí)間只會(huì)用fromto怎么辦?

下面是一些可參考的替換方法：

例：1998-2008

From 1998 to 2008

Between 1998 and 2008

Over the selected time scale

Over the recorded time

During the period of ten years

Over this decade

總結(jié)：篇幅太小，可學(xué)的太多。詞匯重在積累，不要覺(jué)得微不足道，有時(shí)候細(xì)節(jié)決定了成敗。

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)之語(yǔ)法(Grammatical Range and Accuracy)

常見(jiàn)問(wèn)題：主謂不一致;時(shí)態(tài)不一致;主語(yǔ)和謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞不搭

其實(shí)相比于大作文，小作文的語(yǔ)法要求真的沒(méi)有那么高，總結(jié)下來(lái)能用的句法不多，但是考生們能犯的錯(cuò)誤真的不少。

問(wèn)題示例：主謂不一致

The six pie charts compares the water use in six regions

問(wèn)題分析

想象一下，這個(gè)開(kāi)頭段的第一句就出現(xiàn)了這樣的語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，考官對(duì)咱們得是啥印象?這種感覺(jué)好比見(jiàn)到了期盼已久的相親對(duì)象，卻第一眼就發(fā)現(xiàn)了對(duì)方牙縫里塞了菜葉。你可能說(shuō)，老師，這種低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤我不會(huì)犯的。 那我就勸你，年輕人，話不要總說(shuō)太滿。

修改建議

The six pie charts compare the water use in six regions

問(wèn)題示例：時(shí)態(tài)不一致

The bar chart compares the number of hours for five selected sports outside school among boys and girls in Australia in 2010. Overall, it is clear that football and basketball are more popular in boys, while the reverse was true for swimming, net and no sports.

問(wèn)題分析

開(kāi)頭改寫(xiě)呈現(xiàn)的信息很完成，并且指明是2010年的事情，這里建議用一般過(guò)去式。而且，一會(huì)兒過(guò)去，一會(huì)現(xiàn)在，你到底想怎樣?

修改建議

The bar chart compares the number of hours for five selected sports outside school among boys and girls in Australia in 2010. Overall, it is clear that football and basketballwere more popular in boys, while the reverse was true for swimming, net and no sports.

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